Musing....hey, it's what I do.
Hey ya'll. I am not usually comfortable with posting my writing, but I thought maybe you could give me some feedback.
Reflections On Old Paintings
One and Two asked of Three when he,
The fourth began to listen.
‘Twas not of lacking ear, said Three
So slightly reminiscent.
‘Twas not a fault of missing piece
Nor shallow inspiration.
The haunt that brought him to his knees:
A sway from One’s vocation.
‘Twas in that horrid instant that
The heart of four went reeling,
And felt with a choke
The hideous yoke
Of a soul without rhyme or feeling.
But moments play not with the infinite
And four as a new invention,
Began to take in
The harmonious din
Of the singing One’s redemption.
One and Two said of four when Three,
The tale having finished,
His stage for human tragedy
Was framed with ears diminished.
posted by Hayden | 8:59 PM
6 Comments:
Three tells to One and Two how Four once began to listen to the Singing One (different than the speaker, "One"?). When he listened he was somehow blown away into chaotic pain but ended in hope realizing there was something eternal to whatever he was listening to. I don't get the last two lines other than that it's all about listening. In fact I don't really get much of anything. Maybe Karissa gets a D for Dense! Maybe Hayden gets an A for being ambiguous! :) (go Plato!) Anyway, Karissa ain't the biggest girl on poetry but was seen as pretty good in high school English classes. I'm obviously missing "the key" or whatever to the poem, maybe you can lead me through dialectic to finding it. Please don't say it's the Timeaus! :/
Anyway, is that the type of feedback you wanted?
Yay for Hayden the poet!
I am not good with poetry, I don't quite understand the end either, but I do like it.
But then again, I confuse myself by trying to figure out rythm.
I'm not sure if I fully get it either, but I've never really studied poetry. However, the poem fills me with a sense of joy and happiness. I'm thinking that this "four" may have much more to do with "The Lion, the Witch, and the Wardrobe" than with Timeaus, and that this might be a poem about redemption and salvation, but I do not think I understand fully the depths of this poem. Then again, I can't say I fully understand the greatness of our salvation, but I can only be filled with awe and wonder.
Even though I'm not sure I really get the poem, I really felt moved by it and I must say I think that it was excellent.
omg....hayden, who knew? it's amazing. i love it! u are an English major!
-michelle
thinking of it in terms of Narnia makes a lot better sense!
so is that what it's about oh master Poet? (and how was LA last night btw?)
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